God, I love your Ronon. LOVE. HIM. I hope you don't mind a clips reel. I printed this out and read it with a highlighter in hand, which makes me an Hth!Geek, I think.
Wait, you don’t like the spaghetti? Who doesn’t like spaghetti?”
“Me, I guess.”
Ding ding!
“I know if I had Sheppard coming around here every night, I’d be keeping twenty bottles of lube and one powerbar, not the other way around.”
LOL! That Ronon Dex is a practical man.
As soon as the first spoonful was in his mouth, his eyes closed and he made a small, startled noise in his chest. It was good – salty and slick and strong.
You know you could use that last line again when you get to the blowjob. ;)
“I would eat this every day.”
That one, too.
“Great, my speakeasy has a bouncer.
HEE!!!!
He wasn’t used to seeing it on McKay’s face, but he’d seen it plenty of other places in the last few weeks.
I love this recognition you build in of Ronon's universal appeal, and his reaction to it. His own casual acceptance of the fact that most of Atlantis wants to jump his bones...and yet...he's resisted. Fascinating. And ringing truer than the liberty bell. You've done some astonishing stuff here.
He’d always had a voice that people responded well to, even when he was nineteen and gangly and uptight.
Awwww! I have absolutely no problem picturing that Ronon.
“All I’m doing is knocking on the door, McKay. You can answer it or not.”
Wow, that's a great line.
“Tell me what to do....”
McKay shivered and pressed closer to him, sliding his hands inside Ronon’s sweater and up his sides. “God, I don’t even care. Just be naked while you’re doing it, all right?”
I really like how you deal with Ronon's "follows orders" mentality without it devolving into some kitschy D/s thing. It's just...NOT that, and I'm incredibly happy to see a different scenario played out so beautifully. This is just...beautiful!
He must have been a little disoriented when McKay pressed something into his hand, because all he could think was that he was sorry it wasn’t more candy.
Hee! Y'know, for a simple man, Ronon's pretty darn complicated.
But then, if you couldn’t do a favor for the man who’d given you a whole box of his Kraft Dinner....
Amen, brother.
“You’re a good fuck, too,” Ronon said. It didn’t quite sound like the polite thing to say, but he didn’t know what kind of etiquette Rodney’s people used in such situations, so he was forced to rely on Rodney’s lead. Rodney wasn’t normally his first choice to model Earth social conventions for him, but there was nobody else handy.
Good call there, Ronon. But his "you're a good fuck, too" is so darn sweet. He just kills me!
“I don’t understand a word you’re saying.”
“You aren’t bright, though, which is a small mercy. If you could do calculus, I’d probably have to kill myself. It’d be the only honorable way out.”
This was probably my favorite moment of the whole story (a story in which, as you can see, I had MANY favorite moments). It's a great Rodney line, it's incredibly telling, because of course Ronon is bright and ridiculously handsome, and damn if he hasn't just given Rodney exactly what he needed, and so in many ways he's perfect for Rodney, except...there's John.
“I don’t need this. I don’t need...two of you.”
“There’s really only one of me,” Ronon said mildly.
God. So perfect. Honestly, it got me all teared up, and maybe it's just because we all know what kind of week it's been, but you almost got me going over the macaroni & cheese, and this line did it for real.
I'm incredibly impressed. You've made me like McKay (talk about a shameful sekrit -- I don't even like McKay, let alone want him coming between Sheppard and Dex!), you've made me feel for all three of them, and you've left me hoping for more.
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Wait, you don’t like the spaghetti? Who doesn’t like spaghetti?”
“Me, I guess.”
Ding ding!
“I know if I had Sheppard coming around here every night, I’d be keeping twenty bottles of lube and one powerbar, not the other way around.”
LOL! That Ronon Dex is a practical man.
As soon as the first spoonful was in his mouth, his eyes closed and he made a small, startled noise in his chest. It was good – salty and slick and strong.
You know you could use that last line again when you get to the blowjob. ;)
“I would eat this every day.”
That one, too.
“Great, my speakeasy has a bouncer.
HEE!!!!
He wasn’t used to seeing it on McKay’s face, but he’d seen it plenty of other places in the last few weeks.
I love this recognition you build in of Ronon's universal appeal, and his reaction to it. His own casual acceptance of the fact that most of Atlantis wants to jump his bones...and yet...he's resisted. Fascinating. And ringing truer than the liberty bell. You've done some astonishing stuff here.
He’d always had a voice that people responded well to, even when he was nineteen and gangly and uptight.
Awwww! I have absolutely no problem picturing that Ronon.
“All I’m doing is knocking on the door, McKay. You can answer it or not.”
Wow, that's a great line.
“Tell me what to do....”
McKay shivered and pressed closer to him, sliding his hands inside Ronon’s sweater and up his sides. “God, I don’t even care. Just be naked while you’re doing it, all right?”
I really like how you deal with Ronon's "follows orders" mentality without it devolving into some kitschy D/s thing. It's just...NOT that, and I'm incredibly happy to see a different scenario played out so beautifully. This is just...beautiful!
He must have been a little disoriented when McKay pressed something into his hand, because all he could think was that he was sorry it wasn’t more candy.
Hee! Y'know, for a simple man, Ronon's pretty darn complicated.
But then, if you couldn’t do a favor for the man who’d given you a whole box of his Kraft Dinner....
Amen, brother.
“You’re a good fuck, too,” Ronon said. It didn’t quite sound like the polite thing to say, but he didn’t know what kind of etiquette Rodney’s people used in such situations, so he was forced to rely on Rodney’s lead. Rodney wasn’t normally his first choice to model Earth social conventions for him, but there was nobody else handy.
Good call there, Ronon. But his "you're a good fuck, too" is so darn sweet. He just kills me!
“I don’t understand a word you’re saying.”
“You aren’t bright, though, which is a small mercy. If you could do calculus, I’d probably have to kill myself. It’d be the only honorable way out.”
This was probably my favorite moment of the whole story (a story in which, as you can see, I had MANY favorite moments). It's a great Rodney line, it's incredibly telling, because of course Ronon is bright and ridiculously handsome, and damn if he hasn't just given Rodney exactly what he needed, and so in many ways he's perfect for Rodney, except...there's John.
“I don’t need this. I don’t need...two of you.”
“There’s really only one of me,” Ronon said mildly.
God. So perfect. Honestly, it got me all teared up, and maybe it's just because we all know what kind of week it's been, but you almost got me going over the macaroni & cheese, and this line did it for real.
I'm incredibly impressed. You've made me like McKay (talk about a shameful sekrit -- I don't even like McKay, let alone want him coming between Sheppard and Dex!), you've made me feel for all three of them, and you've left me hoping for more.